Fishpaw~SC Med Cat Apprenticre

[fishpaw]

Other Accounts::none


Name:: Fishpaw

Clan:: Shadowclan

Gender:: She-cat


Age In Moons:: 6 moons


Position:: Medicine Cat Aprentice


Appearance:: Fishpaw is black. She has a dark mysterious glint to her fur. Her yellow eyes are filled with kindness and mystery. She has one fish like spot on her belly.


Personality:: Fishpaw lookes mysterious, but is very kind. She is hyper . Once her mouth starts it never stops! She is brave and loyal to her clan, family, and friends. Loving and smart Fishpaw is great for helping.


History:: Fishpaw was born to Shadowclan warriors: Larkface and Shadoweyes. She lived in Shadowclan her whole life. Learning about the warrior code, she saw Birdcall healing cats. She then knew that was her calling. Ever since she has wanted to be Medcine Cat Apprentice.


RP Example:: Fishpaw padded into her den. She purred. Today had been a great day. She had healed the sick kit named Fairykit and had taken a thorn out of Glistenwing's paw. She found her nest and setteled down to sleep.


Picture::


Code Words:: Follow The Stars


If you make another character, do you keep them all on one account?:: [/u] no, you make them another one


If your character leaves a thread, what do you do?:: [/u] wait for someone to post


If you are a StarClan cat, can you send dreams to any cat you want?::[/u] no...only to the medincine cats and leaders


How Did You Hear About My Site?:: From an advertisement on Warriors 4 ever


Other:: HII

[Heronpaw]

(did you hear it from my advertisment??) Hello Fishpaw and welcome to CoF(clans of five), fellow medicine cat apprentice! uhm... Your bio needs a bit of a fixing up.
Here are some tips:

Appearance For your first sentence, in appearance, you say that Fishpaw is black. Thats pretty simple, but not what were looking for. Use detail, and make it longer! instead of black, use ebony or onyx(sp?). Be creative! I know you can do that. What color is the fish-like spot? How long is her fur? Is she a long-haired, semi-long-haired, or just short-haired? How big is she? Use words like slender, scrawny, large, meduim, hefty, light-weight, muscular... try not to make her too normal, and definately not abnormal. (Run a spell check while your at it.)

Personality Again, use a little more detail. Length and detail count! Make your sentences interesting, and don't be afraid to go all out. what are her intrests, does she go for hunts? does she know how to fight? Is she hard-working, lazy, or just laid-back? Can she be stubborn? What is her greatest fear, and her weaknesses? What ticks her off? Can she ever be anti/non-social? Don't forget ot give her flaws or strengths, and the appearance and personality portion of the bio have to be about six to seven detailed sentences. ^^

[.:lPoppyStarl:.]

You need alot more on everything, especially if you want to be meddie apprentice. You need to show us that you are worthy of the spot! :]
Uhh. OH! And your 2nd question is wrong! Check teh rules to see what the corect answer is!